Feedback From 1st Cut Of 'Before I Die'

We edited as much as possible before we presented to the rest of the class.
The feedback we received was because of the subject and genre of the film, use soft transitions and no cuts. We were also told to soften the music at the beginning of the opening and introduce it gradually. Also, a lot of the shots were the same because we mainly used medium shots so when we film again we will shoot from a lot more different angles and try and get a variety. People suggested we use some extreme close-ups to help portray the emotion and point of view shots to help tell the story. More locations and voice-overs were more suggestions that people thought would make the opening better.

Planning our new idea and the summary of the plot

Our group took the time to sit down and decide on another idea for different film opening as our previous one hadn't worked out so well. We wanted to change our idea completely by using a different genre. We decided we wanted to make an effective and dramatic film but in the opposite way to a horror so we came up with a whole new concept. We though about how effective we could make it and if it would appeal to an audience. We also figured out not to give too much of the film plot away in the opening 2 minutes because we wanted to build tension and engage the audience. Faye, Charlotte and myself all went away and thought about a new idea for the film. When we got together to discuss what to do we shared the ideas from each others film ideas. All were different but based on the same sort of genre. As a group we decided we wanted to do drama as that was one of our favourite genres to watch and knew it was popular with people our age.

Our new film is called 'Before I Die' and is about a teenage girl called Rose who has been diagnosed with cancer. What happens in the film is Rose (who will be played by Charlotte Andreas) makes a list of things she wants to do before she dies and as she does them she ticks them off. She does this with the help of her best friend Josephine ( who will be played by myelf) She also has to bring herself to tell her boyfriend that she is going to die. The film is aimed at mainly females of any age above 10.